" Hello this is Ted I'm calling for a pick up," the phone was silent then a voice replied.
"What's the weight?" The voice sounded like a grizzled trucker looks. Ted couldn't speak he had never done anything like this before. When he became a senator they gave him this card with the number he had just dialed on it. The card said in big letters cleaning. The voice asked again, this time in a more aggravated tone. " What's the weight?" Ted took a deep breath
" I think about 175 pounds."
The voice laughed " That's pretty big; you higher ups make a mess and then don't know how to clean it up on your own. you have no problem making it but when it comes to cleaning up you become unable to tell your ass from your head. Anyway where will it be?"
Ted at this moment realized there was no coming back from this. " You will find the body in the closet."
The man on the phone in a scarred voice replied, " this is a cleaning company for high end furniture."
Ted then flipped the card over it said in red pen. To help tidy things up for the big interview at your place.
4 comments:
Riehl,
this is a great entry. And thanks again for always volunteering to share in class, it really helps create the sharing environment and hopefully people will follow suit soon.
About publishing:
1. try to distinguish your off-the-top-of-your-head writing, with published writing by adding in polished bits. the journal writing is straight right-brain stuff but the publishing is where the left-brain contributes and improves on the right-brain ideas. You need both to capitalize as a writer.
2. don't forget to use paragraphs. aside from being grammatically correct, it makes the writing look more professional and readable. It is generally more engaging:)
ps- do you mind if I share the link to your blog with Ms. Sanders? I'm sure she misses discussions with you.
OK, I'm going to fix the last entry I did. I just did it quick and didn't really look over it. I wasn't sure at the time how you wanted us to format our blogs so this is very helpful. Also it would be fine if you send the link to Ms.Sanders.
This was such a good journal! You should continue you it. You have a really good writing style and your conflicts are always interesting!
LMAO! this has to be the best interpretation of the six-word stories yet! i liked the twist that you put at the end. i remember when you read it in class and fell like i though it was a little dfferent when you first told it. this ending, however, was the better and more impactful choice. :)
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